25.02.21 [영어/작문] Harvard Orchestra in Korea 작문

교정본

People share common sense with others by discussing their tastes in music. The songs that are on the top rankings of the Billboard chart are especially prestigious to everyone around the globe; thus, you may be able to talk actively with international friends if you simply choose music as a topic.  

Music is such a good way to alleviate the fury I feel when I have a tough time. More than that, I tend to turn on the music at the same time when I head somewhere in public transportation. I can forget the burden of life while relaxing with calming jazz or R&B songs.  

I think that Korea has a cultural prevalence when it comes to music, especially in relation to K-pop. Koreans frequently listen to the songs of boy and girl bands, which are renowned all over the world. I felt proud of K-pop when I heard BTS' songs on the street in Spain when I was an international student there. Other Koreans probably feel the same as me regarding K-pop.

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오늘의 노트

Note:
We don't use "especially" independently. We add the word or phrase that it is emphasizing:
     Especially, young children are vulnerable in cases of food poisoning. (WRONG)
     People, especially young children, are vulnerable in cases of food poisoning. (CORRECT)
     Young children are especially vulnerable in cases of food poisoning. (CORRECT)
     In cases of food poisoning, young children are especially vulnerable. (CORRECT)

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격식 있게

Individuals connect with one another through shared interests, such as music. The songs that top the Billboard chart hold significant prestige and are recognized globally; therefore, music can serve as an excellent conversation starter with international friends.

Music is an effective means to alleviate stress during challenging times. Furthermore, I often listen to music while using public transportation. Calming genres like jazz or R&B allow me to escape the burdens of everyday life and relax.

South Korea has a notable cultural influence, particularly in the realm of music, with K-pop being a prime example. Koreans commonly enjoy the music produced by various boy and girl bands, which have gained worldwide fame. I experienced a sense of pride in K-pop when I heard BTS' songs while walking the streets of Spain during my time as an international student. I believe many other Koreans share my appreciation for K-pop.

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자연스럽게

People love to connect over their favorite music. The top songs on the Billboard chart are super popular worldwide, so if you bring up music, you can have great conversations with friends from different countries.

Music really helps me chill out when I’m feeling stressed. I often play music while I'm on public transport. It helps me forget about my worries while I enjoy some relaxing jazz or R&B.

Korea really stands out when it comes to music, especially with K-pop. Everyone here loves listening to boy and girl bands that are famous all over the world. I felt so proud to hear BTS playing in the streets of Spain when I was studying there. I’m sure other Koreans feel the same way about K-pop too.