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25.02.26 [영어/작문] Empowering Immigrants Voting in Korea 작문

빠블리또 2025. 2. 27. 19:13

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I believe that multiple and different perspectives make a society abundant with characteristics. Representatives of each community voice their thoughts, which fill distinct aspects into a society while harmonizing all those. In a group biased toward only one perspective, a variety of phobia may appear. Hence, immigrants can input diversity into a society, with which the public citizens may expand the scope of their notions.

It is inevitable that public organizations should present a socializing program for immigrants. They need to learn cultural contexts, languages, and other social norms. There won’t be any choice but to take the official course so that they get involved in a country effectively at the very first stage of immigration.  

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오늘의 노트


1. HIGHLIGHT:
Spelling (Persperctives vs. Perspectives): The original sentence uses "persperctives," which is a misspelling. The correct word is "perspectives," which refers to different ways of thinking or viewing things.

Preposition (Abundant of vs. Abundant with): The original sentence uses "abundant of," but the correct preposition in this context is "abundant with." In English, we use "abundant with" to describe something that has a lot of a particular quality or thing. So, "abundant with characteristics" is the proper phrasing.


2. EXAMPLES:
   - Different perspectives help us understand the world better.
   - A society rich with diverse perspectives is more vibrant.
   - I appreciate multiple perspectives when making decisions.
   - Our community is abundant with characteristics that reflect our culture.

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격식 있게


I believe that multiple perspectives contribute to a society's richness and diversity. Representatives from each community share their thoughts, which add unique qualities to society while fostering harmony among them. In a group that is limited to a single perspective, various forms of bias may arise. Therefore, immigrants can introduce diversity into a society, allowing citizens to broaden their understanding and perspectives.

It is essential for public organizations to implement social integration programs for immigrants. They need to learn about cultural contexts, languages, and social norms. It is important for them to participate in official courses to facilitate their effective integration into the country from the very beginning of their immigration experience.

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자연스럽게


I think having a bunch of different viewpoints makes a society richer and more interesting. Each community brings something unique to the table, and when they share their ideas, it helps bring everyone together. If a group only thinks one way, it can create fears and issues. So, when immigrants come in, they add diversity, and that helps everyone think bigger and broader!

It’s super important for community organizations to set up programs to help immigrants socialize. They need to get to know the culture, learn the language, and understand social norms. Taking an official course can really help them fit in right from the start when they move to a new country.