25.02.18 [영어/작문] EU Enforces Digital Markets Act 작문

교정본

As each country has its own legislation, companies should localize compliance according to each country’s laws. If companies expand their branches abroad and employ native staff, they may comply more closely with legal requirements.

If a big tech company dominates the market strongly and makes high investments, small companies will lose chances to foster their businesses. Hence, in my opinion, big tech companies shouldn’t try to occupy the market with their preferred services or invade markets made up of only small business owners.

If a device allows third-party apps, users have more flexibility to utilize a large number of apps. On the other hand, this flexibility without adequate regulation to ensure security stability may result in the invasion of hackers or viruses.

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오늘의 노트

1. HIGHLIGHT:  
Verb Tense (Dominated vs. Dominates): The original sentence uses "dominated," which is past tense. However, the corrected sentence uses "dominates," the present tense, to indicate a general or ongoing situation, which fits better in this context.

Verb Choice (Had vs. Makes): The original sentence uses "had," which is past tense. The corrected sentence uses "makes" in present tense to show that the tech company currently has a strong influence in the market.

Noun Form (Investment vs. Investments): The original sentence uses "investment" in singular form, but in this context, it should be plural. The corrected version uses "investments" to reflect that tech companies typically make multiple investments, not just one.

Future Tense (Would Have Lost vs. Will Lose): The original sentence uses "would have lost," which is a past conditional form. Since the question asks about a possible future situation, the corrected sentence uses "will lose," which is the future tense and better reflects the potential outcome.

Plural (Business vs. Businesses): The original sentence uses "business," which is singular. The corrected sentence changes it to "businesses" to reflect that there are many small companies, each with its own business.


2. EXAMPLES:  
   - If it rains, the flowers bloom beautifully.  
   - When he studies hard, he passes his exams.  
   - If she practices regularly, she becomes a better singer.  
   - If companies invest wisely, they can grow and succeed.  
   - When a student works diligently, they often achieve their goals.  

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격식 있게

As each country has its own legislation, companies should localize their compliance efforts according to the laws of each country. If companies expand their operations abroad and employ local staff, they may be better equipped to adhere to legal requirements.

If a large tech company maintains a strong market dominance and makes significant investments, smaller companies may struggle to develop their businesses. Therefore, in my opinion, large tech companies should not seek to monopolize the market with their preferred services or invade markets that consist solely of small business owners.

Allowing third-party apps on a device provides users with increased flexibility to access a wide variety of applications. However, this flexibility, if not accompanied by adequate regulation to ensure security and stability, may lead to risks such as hacking or virus attacks.

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자연스럽게

Since every country has its own laws, companies should adjust their rules to fit each place they operate in. If companies open branches in other countries and hire local workers, they can follow the laws better.

If a large tech company controls the market and spends a lot of money, smaller companies might struggle to grow. So I think big tech companies shouldn’t try to take over the market with their favorite services or push out small businesses.

When a device allows third-party apps, users can enjoy using lots of different apps. But, if there isn't enough control to keep things safe, this might lead to problems with hackers or viruses.