24.10.28 [영어/작문] Playing Musical Instruments 작문

교정본

I used to play the recorder and piano when I was an elementary student. However, there were no options other than playing them because of the educational system, and the adults around me designated me to practice them. It has been a long time since I last played an instrument, so I may not be able to play any instrument the right way.

My memorable experience regarding playing the piano is that many teachers in Korean piano academies draw grapes on sheet music with a pencil, which indicates how many times kids practice playing the piano before a time limit. Coloring grapes on the sheet was a joy that helped me continue practicing while forgetting the boredom.

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오늘의 노트

1. HIGHLIGHT:
Article Use (the piano): The original sentence omits the article "the" before "piano." In English, singular nouns that are specific usually require an article. The corrected sentence uses "the piano" to refer to the specific instrument, which makes it grammatically accurate.

Verb Choice (indicates vs. implies): The original uses "implies," which suggests a hint rather than a clear statement. "Indicates" is a more precise verb in this context, as it directly shows the number of times kids practice. The change makes the sentence more straightforward.

Word Choice (limit vs. limitation): "Time limitation" is awkward in this context. "Time limit" is more common and concise when referring to a specific duration allowed for practice. The correction enhances clarity.

Expression (that helped me continue): The original phrase "a joy to continue practicing" is vague. Adding "that helped me" clarifies the sentence and indicates that coloring grapes directly contributed to the enjoyment of practice, improving the connection between the ideas.

Word Choice (boredom vs. boring): The original uses "the boring," which is grammatically incorrect in this context. "Boredom" is the noun form and correctly conveys the idea of feeling uninterested. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.


2. EXAMPLES:
- Playing the piano requires dedication and practice.
- Make sure to finish your practice within the time limit.
- I experienced boredom during the long piano recital.

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격식 있게

I used to play the recorder and the piano when I was an elementary student. However, I didn't have a choice in learning these instruments due to the educational system and pressure from adults around me. It has been a long time since I last played, so I may not be able to play any instrument correctly now.

One memorable experience I had while playing the piano was that many teachers in Korean piano academies used to draw grapes on sheet music with a pencil. Each grape represented the number of times children were supposed to practice playing the piano before a set time. The act of coloring these grapes on the sheet music made practicing enjoyable and helped me to continue practicing without feeling bored.

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자연스럽게

When I was younger, I used to play the recorder and piano at school. I didn't really have a choice because my teachers and parents wanted me to practice. It's been a while since I last played, so I might be a bit rusty now.

I remember when I used to play the piano in Korea. The teachers there had this fun way of motivating us to practice. They would draw grapes on our music sheets with a pencil to show how many times we needed to practice before a deadline. It was a cool way to make practicing more fun and keep us going even when we felt bored.