25.01.22 [영어/작문] Steven Yeun Wins Award at Emmys 작문

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The award itself plays a role in impacting the public’s awareness with a positive perception of the artists. Even if the artists are just nominated as candidates, it makes the audience aware of the efforts and excellence of the artists’ masterpieces.

When an actor or actress wins an award at some prominent ceremony, it must be a milestone in their career, proving they did a great job in their craft. This way, the public may view the actor or actress as having a high level of capability.

I have watched The Beef recently on Netflix to learn English in daily conversation. Each episode lively depicted raw human emotions and thoughts in confrontations between characters, which left an impressive perception of the series. Although there are some episodes I haven’t watched yet, I am keen on binge-watching all the episodes left.

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1. HIGHLIGHT:
Word Choice (Awards vs. Ceremony): The original sentence uses "awards," which refers to the prizes themselves. However, "ceremony" is more accurate in this context because it refers to the event where the awards are presented. "Awards" is too broad, while "ceremony" better describes the specific event.

Verb Form (Proves vs. Proving): The original sentence uses "proves," but the corrected version changes it to "proving" to improve sentence structure. "Proving" acts as a present participle, making the sentence smoother and connecting it better to the idea of the milestone in the actor’s career.

Verb Choice (Estimate vs. View): The original sentence uses "estimate," which implies making a rough calculation or guess. "View" is a more appropriate verb here, meaning to form an opinion or judgment about the actor or actress. "View" fits the context of public perception more naturally than "estimate."

Article (The vs. Having): In the corrected sentence, "having" is used in place of "the," because "having" is a present participle that modifies the noun "capability." It also avoids the redundancy of using the definite article "the" in front of a general quality, making the sentence grammatically cleaner.

Word Choice (Value vs. Capability): The original sentence uses "value," which is too general for this context. "Capability" more specifically refers to the actor’s skill or ability, which fits the intended meaning of assessing their talents.


2. EXAMPLES:
   - When a musician receives a Grammy award at a prestigious ceremony, it is a significant achievement in their journey.
   - Winning an Oscar is a pivotal moment for many actors, proving their hard work and dedication.
   - The audience often views the director as having exceptional skill after a highly awarded film is released.

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격식 있게

Awards significantly contribute to enhancing public awareness and fostering a positive perception of the artists involved. Even a simple nomination brings attention to the dedication and excellence demonstrated in the artists' works, allowing the audience to appreciate their achievements.

Winning an award at a prestigious ceremony is often a pivotal moment in an actor's career, serving as recognition of their exceptional talents and efforts. Such accolades can lead the public to regard the actor as highly skilled and accomplished in their profession.

Recently, I watched "Beef" on Netflix to improve my English through daily conversations. Each episode vividly portrays raw human emotions and thoughts during confrontations between characters, leaving a lasting impression of the series. While there are still some episodes I have yet to view, I am eager to binge-watch the remaining episodes.

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자연스럽게

Awards really help people notice and think positively about the artists. Even if someone is just nominated, it shows everyone that the artists are working hard and doing amazing stuff.

When an actor or actress wins an award at a big ceremony, it’s like a big moment for them. It shows that they’re really good at what they do. Because of this, people start to see them as super talented.

I just watched The Beef on Netflix to practice my English conversation skills. Each episode really showed strong feelings and thoughts during the fights between characters, and I thought the series was impressive. I haven’t seen all the episodes yet, but I'm excited to binge-watch the rest!