25.01.21 [영어/작문] New Strawberry Variety 작문

교정본

I’ve never tried unique strawberry varieties. However, I see Seolhyang a lot whenever I visit a supermarket near my house. It has a distinct color, like bright pink, and seems mouthwatering. I hope to taste it someday.

For my personal preference, I tend to lean toward sweeter strawberries. Winter is a good season to have the sweetest strawberries compared to other strawberries grown in a greenhouse. Hence, I love to buy strawberries nowadays.

The diversity of strawberry options is important to meet each consumer’s different needs. This way, farmers can secure appropriate profits to continue their business. Additionally, if they can harvest a specific strawberry variety that can grow even in severe environmental conditions like high temperatures, they can cope with crises caused by climate change.

-

하이라이트

1. HIGHLIGHT:
Relative Pronoun (Which vs. That): The original sentence uses "which," but in this context, "that" is more appropriate. In defining relative clauses (which specify essential information), "that" is commonly used in American English, whereas "which" is used in non-defining clauses.

Noun Form (Limitation vs. Conditions): The original sentence uses "limitation," which is singular. The corrected sentence uses "conditions" in the plural form, which is more appropriate when referring to various environmental factors like temperature, humidity, etc.

Plural (Temperature vs. Temperatures): The original sentence uses "temperature" in the singular form, but "temperatures" in the plural form is better here. It indicates various temperature levels that could affect the strawberry's growth, not just a single temperature.

Noun Form (Crisis vs. Crises): The original sentence uses "crisis," but since the sentence refers to multiple instances or types of crises related to climate change, the plural form "crises" is needed.

Article (The vs. No article): In the corrected sentence, "the" before "climate change" is unnecessary because "climate change" is generally understood as a specific global issue and doesn’t need an article.


2. EXAMPLES:
   - The book that I borrowed was fascinating.
   - Certain plants can thrive in environmental conditions that are harsh.
   - High temperatures can affect many crops in the summer.
   - Climate change brings about numerous crises around the world.
   - Scientists study climate change to understand its effects better.

-

격식 있게

I have not yet experienced unique strawberry varieties. However, I frequently see Seolhyang whenever I visit a supermarket near my home. It has a distinctive color, resembling bright pink, and appears very appetizing. I hope to taste it someday.

Personally, I have a preference for sweeter strawberries. Winter is an excellent season for enjoying the sweetest strawberries compared to other varieties grown in greenhouses. Therefore, I love to purchase strawberries at this time of year.

The diversity of strawberry options is significant in order to satisfy the varying needs of consumers. This approach enables farmers to secure adequate profits to sustain their businesses. Furthermore, if they are able to harvest specific strawberry varieties that thrive even in extreme environmental conditions, such as high temperatures, they can better manage the challenges posed by climate change.

-

자연스럽게

I’ve never tried any fun types of strawberries. But I see this kind called Seolhyang a lot when I go to the supermarket near my house. It’s super bright pink and looks really tasty! I hope I can try it someday.

I like sweeter strawberries more! Winter is the best time to get the sweetest strawberries, way better than the ones grown in greenhouses. That’s why I love buying strawberries right now!

It’s really important to have different kinds of strawberries so everyone can find what they like. When farmers grow different types, they can make good money to keep their businesses going. Plus, if they can grow strawberries that survive in tough conditions, like really hot weather, they can handle problems from climate change better!